Chapter 12:
The door opened. In walked a person just about Emma's age. She had dark shiny hair, with a pink sleeved shirt along with blue, tattered jeans. She had blue eyes, and a rather pointed nose. " Oh my goodness!" she gasped. "Are you one of Them?!" " One of who?" Emma asked. "Dr. Ruin's army! They're chasing me and Destiny!" "Wait a minute, who are you?" Emma said. " Melony. I guess you aren't one of them. Who are you?" she asked "Emma. Wow. Are you on a mission, too?" Emma gasped. "Sure am. I fell into this room from my closet. I have powers. They are to morph into anything I want and to have voices in my head." Melony replied. "Me too! Emma said.
All of a sudden, her old friend Destiny, a fairy, flew into the room.
Way to build up an anti-evil army! But who are you fighting and why? remind your reader, adn fillin more stuff.
Posted by: BB | July 10, 2005 at 11:00 PM
OK, let's have a whole lot of description right about now. We need a quick breather and a chance to picture the story. Where is Emma? Who exactly are the other characters and what do they look like?
Posted by: pam | July 11, 2005 at 07:20 AM